under orange crushed sky
I watched you drive into
sunsets with my heart
still in your hands
on the dark side of the moon
I collect stars into mason jars
their light guiding me home
in dreams I reminisce of
your last promising kiss
I watched you drive into
sunsets with my heart
still in your hands
on the dark side of the moon
I collect stars into mason jars
their light guiding me home
in dreams I reminisce of
your last promising kiss
- Written for Quadrille #189:Poems Most Mad & Moonly
Very much LOVE those stars in jars.
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DeleteVery nice. Collecting stars int mason jars, how lovely would that be.
ReplyDeleteThank you Di.
DeleteVery surreal, powerful images used. I like this a lot.
ReplyDeleteThank you very much.
DeleteSo much conveyed in just 44 words and in just a impactful way.
ReplyDeleteThank you JadeLi.
DeleteThe heartbreak of a love lost. Beautifully written!
ReplyDeleteThanks Frank. Much appreciated.
DeleteSweet sentiments. Those captured stars within this captured moment.
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DeleteBeautiful, tender...esp love the close
ReplyDeleteThank you Ron.
DeleteSo expressive of grief and loneliness ("I collect stars into mason jars") - and loss.
ReplyDeleteThank you Dora.
DeleteA poingnant and romantic quadrille, Maria, and I love the idea of collecting ‘stars into mason jars’.
ReplyDeleteThank you Kim.
DeleteI do love those collected stars, somtimes we have to keep the little light that there is.
ReplyDeleteTrue. Thank you Bjorn.
DeleteI love the imagery here--driving into the sunset with my heart and collecting stars in a mason jar--and so sad and touching at the end. Great work!
ReplyDeleteThanks Merril. Much appreciated words.
DeleteBeautiful imagery.
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DeleteVery whimsical, very romantic. Luv it.
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Thank you Gillena.
DeleteI like the contrast of dark and light.
ReplyDeleteThank you Kerfe.
DeleteSigh....so romantic! I love the shift from the first to the second stanza. The reality to the collection of stars from the night sky. Beautifully done.
ReplyDeleteThank you Lillian for your kind words.
DeletePowerful imagery 🙌
ReplyDeleteThanks AJ.
DeleteLovely.❤️
ReplyDeleteThank you Melissa.
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