Monday, August 29, 2016

you always leave

you always leave me
when I just start getting comfortable
snatching the rug underneath my feet
and to be honest
I have cried out all my tears
my tongue has depleted its prayers
I know it’s not very Christian
but I’m just being honest


18 comments:

  1. I love the way this is said:
    "my tongue has depleted its prayers"

    A sad piece.

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  2. It is sad when the voice of prayer is depleted. There is always a new day, but some days one is just tired I guess.

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  3. Very sad this is. And it doen't matter that one isn't being ver Christian when the rug keeps being ripped fro under one.

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  4. What a great poem... it feels so conversational, like the reader is listening in. Really nice!

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  5. Gayle Walters RoseAugust 29, 2016 at 9:59 PM

    I understand the feeling of depleting your prayers. What may be un-Christian is always leaving someone...how many chances do they get?

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  6. I think at some point it's the other that should be praying... (Or paying)

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  7. I know this so well. Maybe direct the prayers towards strength to leave the person that's doing this to you.

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  8. A place where
    leaves never
    fall.. a place
    wHeRe no one
    ever leaves..
    a place
    inside
    a fortress
    of Love that
    no one can break away..
    diffiCult.. yes.. but possible
    @lEast
    for soMe..
    and perHaps
    it stARTs as a slow
    dance for OnE..
    @leAst
    and
    west
    foR one..
    as two hemispheres
    of bRain join and
    beComE friEnds
    WiTH BoDy
    for ever.. noW...
    hemiSpHeres Now..
    of eARTh not withstanding2..:)

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  9. You captured a real sense of forlorn hope and despair regarding this.

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  10. I think the Psalmist would have liked this. He, too, had his complaints against the Almighty. :-)

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  11. Thank you everyone. I assure you this is a work of fiction :)

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    1. Oh, then my comment below is a bit superfluous! Instead, let me say what a convincing piece of writing, lol.

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  12. You put me in mind of a therapist's words, long ago: 'If someone's playing a game with you, the thing to do is, YOU stop playing.' (For what it's worth.)

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  13. Honest, emotive and conversational...which is what prayer can be!

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  14. The sadness is undeniable. So glad it is fictitious. :)

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