you always leave me
when I just start getting comfortable
snatching the rug underneath my feet
and to be honest
I have cried out all my tears
my tongue has depleted its prayers
I know it’s not very Christian
but I’m just being honest
- Written for dVerse Quadrille #15 - Leaves.
I love the way this is said:
ReplyDelete"my tongue has depleted its prayers"
A sad piece.
It is sad when the voice of prayer is depleted. There is always a new day, but some days one is just tired I guess.
ReplyDeleteVery sad this is. And it doen't matter that one isn't being ver Christian when the rug keeps being ripped fro under one.
ReplyDeleteWhat a great poem... it feels so conversational, like the reader is listening in. Really nice!
ReplyDeleteI understand the feeling of depleting your prayers. What may be un-Christian is always leaving someone...how many chances do they get?
ReplyDeleteSad and honest poem. Lovely!
ReplyDeleteI think at some point it's the other that should be praying... (Or paying)
ReplyDeleteBeautifully poignant ❤
ReplyDeleteBeautifully poignant ❤
ReplyDeleteI know this so well. Maybe direct the prayers towards strength to leave the person that's doing this to you.
ReplyDeleteA place where
ReplyDeleteleaves never
fall.. a place
wHeRe no one
ever leaves..
a place
inside
a fortress
of Love that
no one can break away..
diffiCult.. yes.. but possible
@lEast
for soMe..
and perHaps
it stARTs as a slow
dance for OnE..
@leAst
and
west
foR one..
as two hemispheres
of bRain join and
beComE friEnds
WiTH BoDy
for ever.. noW...
hemiSpHeres Now..
of eARTh not withstanding2..:)
You captured a real sense of forlorn hope and despair regarding this.
ReplyDeleteI think the Psalmist would have liked this. He, too, had his complaints against the Almighty. :-)
ReplyDeleteThank you everyone. I assure you this is a work of fiction :)
ReplyDeleteOh, then my comment below is a bit superfluous! Instead, let me say what a convincing piece of writing, lol.
DeleteYou put me in mind of a therapist's words, long ago: 'If someone's playing a game with you, the thing to do is, YOU stop playing.' (For what it's worth.)
ReplyDeleteHonest, emotive and conversational...which is what prayer can be!
ReplyDeleteThe sadness is undeniable. So glad it is fictitious. :)
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