Mount Tamalpais, United States by John Towner
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dawn is coming
and we are running out of time
dawn is coming
and will expose our dark shadows
dawn is coming
and will rouse us from our slumber
dawn is coming
to chase away last night’s love songs
dawn is coming
and you will soon leave my side
but when dawn departs
you will return to me once again
- Written for dVerse Meeting the Bar: I'll Say it Again (and Again and Again) where we play with repetition. Come join the fun.
The line repetition followed by the final line works so well. That regret soothed by anticipation. Thanks for joining today.
ReplyDeleteThank you Victoria.
DeleteI like the promise of the last line, and a slight chance in the line above that makes it possible
ReplyDeleteThank you Mark.
DeleteWonderful use of both repetition, and the form known as an Aubade, which is one of my favorites. Love this.
ReplyDeleteIt's an interesting take on dawn, which to me signals hope, the end of the long, dark night, a restful time when our convictions will not be brutally tested. But I can see your point of view, especially with the dawn exposing our dark shadows. Great poem that takes me for a ride.
ReplyDeleteI love the urgency of this poem, that night is a comfort, the only place to be and that it will be shattered by the coming dawn. I love the image of dawn chasing away last night’s love songs and the promise of the last line.
ReplyDeleteThank you De, Amaya and Kim. :)
ReplyDeleteGorgeous!! I absolutely adore this one :D
ReplyDeleteI love how you change the way you see dawn in the last line and the repetition is very powerful.
ReplyDeleteGreat take on the prompt and a hopeful ending.
ReplyDeleteLove the ending coming back into a new beginng
ReplyDeleteI so enjoyed how you changed from dawn is coming to dawn departs. Excellent ending...
ReplyDeleteThank you everyone :)
ReplyDeleteNicely done.
ReplyDeleteI did an Aubade without repetition for Quicky here:
Aubade; His View?
Thank you. Wilk check it out
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