Monday, January 2, 2017

curling hair

the girl watched her mother
stand before a mirror
taking her precious time
forming perfect curls
with her curling iron
so she could look pretty
in the world’s eyes
but the girl saw her
as a jewel that she 
was too blinded to see


- Written for dVerse Quadrille #23 in which we are to write a quadrille poem consisting of a total of 44 words, which includes the word "curl" in some form or another.




14 comments:

  1. Sometimes the things we do make us forget the more important reality about us that others might see. Nice use of "curling hair".

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  2. I like the perspective of that child--- seeing the jewel from the eyes of love ~ Thanks for joining us Arcadia ~

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  3. Oh, that's nice. The little girl is able to see the beauty mommy can't, a wonderful observation. I felt i was there watching

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  4. Perspective is such a fascinating thing!

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  5. The imagery is amazing - you created a vivid picture . So much wisdom here!

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  6. So often we are blind to the real beauty in ourselves... but as long as its only some curls I think it's OK.

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  7. Oh so beautifully writ. She is a jewel in her young daughter's mind. Our parents are on such pedestals when we are very young....and then when we are teenagers something happens and they become "not with it," less smart, frustratingly too interested in our lives that we are trying to live ourselves. And then, they change yet again when we leave the house and can look back in retrospect and they are smart again! And, in reality, it's we who have changed :) You've captured the first phase of this so well!

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  8. Love this. If only we could see ourselves in the mirrored eyes of those who love us most.

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  9. Thanks to each and every one of you for reading and commenting ☺

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  10. Nothing is more beautiful than your mother.

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  11. This curly quadrille is a jewel :)

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