our whispers
echo off walls
secret rendezvous
under midnight stars
hidden love letters
in mysterious boxes
it was all good
for awhile
until one of us
wanted to drag
the other
into the light
and that was
the breaking point
in this secret affair
ooh a secret rendezvous,mysterious boxes, and midnight stars...so good! :)
ReplyDeleteThis is a classic story well told in 44 :)
ReplyDelete"hidden love letters
ReplyDeletein mysterious boxes"
-- I can see this. So vividly.
Who couldn't imagine this? Secrets are delicious for as long as they are kept. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThe echos of whispered secrets sometimes seem more romantic.
ReplyDeleteAlas - some secrets cannot stand the light.
ReplyDeleteThank you everyone. :)
ReplyDeleteLight is usually an ally. But it takes a vindictive tone here, to great effect, Arcadia. There is always more passion in the dark!
ReplyDeleteSometimes its better to remain in the dark..
ReplyDeleteIt's hard to hide from the light. A lot of things I think are unknown, are actually known to everyone around me. I seem to be the only one in the dark :(
ReplyDeleteI really like the effect of the almost rhymes in the opening lines. Better than true rhymes, I think in this context.
ReplyDeleteWell written
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