Monday, June 17, 2019

when the mind won't rest


the sane part of her mind
told her to not fret
over the small details –
everything will fall into place

but her sawmill mind gave
her no peace, going over lines
again and again until her patience
was as thin as late winter ice


- Written for dVerse Quadrille #82 - Fretboard of Poetry

9 comments:

  1. Oh, I love your images especially in the second stanza. Sawmill mind indeed! and thin ice... Well Done!

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  2. Same and sawmill. Love that image. I have been there!

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  3. Sawmill mind - wonderful description and love the thin as winter ice, although around here, winter ice is pretty thick!

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  4. Your poem reminds me of a Bruce Springsteen song, "Two Faces Have I," "one that laughs, one that cries, one says hello, one says goodbye". Well-written description of "two minds".

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  5. A familiar scenario so well described! I love the expression ‘sawmill mind’ and the simile ‘patience… as thin as late winter ice’.

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  6. "as thin as late winter ice" is lovely

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  7. Ah.. to Dance
    And Sing With
    No ReaSon No
    Lines No Choir
    Sheets No LeSSoNS aT aLL
    No Frets
    No
    TiME
    No DiStance
    Or SPace Forevernowmore
    Dance Song Reigns Water Air Gravity Free..:)

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  8. Oh the sawmill mind... that is how we fret.

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  9. Thanks everyone for reading and commenting 🙂

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