as you held my hand
we took our last stand
for us
and our own plan
was to save our land
but thus
we could not withstand
and force to disband
sans fuss
- Written for dVerse Meeting the Bar - Lai It On! prompt where we are asked to write a lai poem, consisting of nine lines using "a" and "b" rhymes. Come join the fun.
Oh dear, it sounds as if there's a sad story behind this one. Well written. I hope it's fiction.
ReplyDeleteYou've roused our curiosity...good fit with form :)
ReplyDeleteYes, it raised all kinds of questions for me too. Nicely written Lai.
ReplyDeleteYes, it raised all kinds of questions for me too. Nicely written Lai.
ReplyDeleteIt looks like a silent protest failed, but at least it was attempted.
ReplyDeleteMaybe one shouldn't disband without fuss..
ReplyDelete'force to disband' That was sad...
ReplyDeleteI'm wondering exactly what happened.....leave 'em wondering since the form is so short!
ReplyDeleteAt least you made the grand effort it sounds like.;)
ReplyDeleteYou nailed this form! I love poetry that leaves me with more questions than answers. The roll of the reader comes sweeping in and that is so engaging. Well done!
ReplyDeleteInquiring minds want to know...! Well done on the form. The voice is a mix of lover and patriot (in the generic sense of the word); well fit for the subject.
ReplyDeleteDon't lose heart with the protest ~ Well done with the form ~
ReplyDeleteA wonderful poem. Indeed tragic and beautiful.
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