Thursday, August 17, 2017

I wanted you

I always watched you from afar
like a star that I could not reach
how I wanted to be in your light
and be the one in your heart

I wanted you to look at me
like you looked at her, who was not me
how my heart ached every night
that you were unattainable

then the stars somehow aligned
and we crossed paths once more
this time I caught your eyes

now in your arms, made up dreams
becoming reality, so I close my eyes
to imprint this to memory

- Written for dVerse Meeting the Bar - Neruda and the free verse sonnet
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17 comments:

  1. Glenn ButtkusAugust 17, 2017 at 8:20 PM

    Always be a dreamer, for our focus on what you want/need will assist in manifesting it in your life; nice free verse love sonnet.

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  2. GraceAugust 17, 2017 at 8:38 PM

    I am happy that the crossed paths, and the happy ending ~

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  3. Frank HubenyAugust 17, 2017 at 11:58 PM

    A dream come true.

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  4. brudbergAugust 18, 2017 at 12:01 AM

    What a wonderful blessing to come together - it does happen it really does

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  5. Sumana RoyAugust 18, 2017 at 2:57 AM

    How I love this dream come true poem!

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  6. Kim M. RussellAugust 18, 2017 at 3:32 AM

    I'm a sucker for a happy ending!

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  7. Paul John DearAugust 18, 2017 at 6:02 AM

    You never know...you just never know.

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  8. Jane DoughertyAugust 18, 2017 at 6:03 AM

    I like how you manage to keep a rhythm to the words despite the free form, and there is a true volta in the right place. I couldn't do it!

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  9. Arcadia MariaAugust 18, 2017 at 8:12 AM

    Thank you everyone :)

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  10. Debi SwimAugust 18, 2017 at 10:30 AM

    "I wanted you to look at me
    like you looked at her, who was not me"

    But a happy ending

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  11. purplepeninportland.comAugust 18, 2017 at 11:39 AM

    We all need to keep dreaming. I am glad yours paid off in happiness.

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  12. Kathy ReedAugust 18, 2017 at 12:39 PM

    The ultimate rebound...like a boomerang love affair...it would have to be worth the wait. ;)

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  13. NosaintAugust 18, 2017 at 2:16 PM

    I like in that final stanza -becoming reality- as though nothing was real before. The ultimate feeling of first love.

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  14. Dr. Crystal GrimesAugust 18, 2017 at 4:19 PM

    A beautiful poem, especially the stars. Thank you. <3

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  15. tonispencerAugust 18, 2017 at 11:09 PM

    A wonderful sonnet that is not about lost love! I love the rhythm in this.

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  16. Rosemary Nissen-WadeAugust 19, 2017 at 12:33 AM

    Lovely and joyous!

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  17. Arcadia MariaAugust 20, 2017 at 1:33 PM

    Thank you everyone again.

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